Two changes to consider. FROM: China has the world’s largest population. Is it time that a country of this size and importance has more than one consulate to handle immigrate visas? Countries of lessor populations and immigrant demand have multiple consulates. TO: China has the world’s largest population. A COUNTRY OF THIS SIZE AND IMPORTANCE SHOULD HAVE MORE THAN ONE CONSULATE TO handle immigrate visas. Countries of lessor populations and immigrant demand have multiple consulates. [sounds a little less condescending not in the form of a question (in my opinion)]. FROM: As the US consulate in China is considered US soil, we ask that everyone who enters is treated with the basic human rights of dignity, respect, and non-discrimination that is fundamental to our way of life. We ask for no special treatment, rather, the same consideration, care and service that anyone requesting a visa in China would and should expect. TO: As the US consulate in China is considered US soil, we ask that everyone who enters is treated with the basic human rights of dignity, respect, and non-discrimination that is fundamental to our way of life. We ask for no special treatment, rather, the same consideration, care and service that anyone requesting OTHER VISA TYPES IN CHINA AND AND VISA REQUESTS THROUGHOUT THE REST OF THE WORLD would and should expect. [it seems to me that China visa wait is the longest, not sure but if so we should say so]